SQUEE! So cute! ^__^

My, that was adorable. I've never really seen the Jap version, so I can't tell if the characterisation was up to scratchy...but it certainly seemed like it was. Just the way Manjoume kept using short exclamations, and how Juudai referred to himself in third person and made all those cute little sound effects...it sounded Japanese, if you know what I mean. Very convincing anyhow, although I wish I could read what happened afterwards.
Anyway, nice job. And thank you for reviving the community ^-^

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it!
I actually was translating it into English as I wrote it cause half of it sounds in Japanese in my head as I think it up. xD I hoped it sounded English enough lol